My Query Letter… Or Lack There Of

Hello all, sorry it’s been so long since I posted but my day job has taken a huge chunk of my brain and time as of late.  I started Querying agents in January of this year and to date have had nothing but rejections.  All sprinkled with variations of although the work has merit  to despite it’s strong points, it just didn’t spark my interest enough to represent you.  All of these end with some form of keep up the good work…or…fight the good fight…which all culminate in good luck in your search for an agent.

As you can imagine it is extremely frustrating.  When I first started Querying (I capitalize that because it’s a BFD) I couldn’t wait for my first rejection letter.  I thought it would make me feel like a real author – and it did…at first, but 26 rejections (or deafening silence) and it’s no longer fun.  I will say that the agents that responded were thoughtful and pleasant, unlike the horror stories of an agent ripping a query to shreds (see previous blog about authors who were initially rejected).  Still, it sucks!  It can cause a real slump in the creative process, making any writer worth his salt feel like they are horrible writers who lack imagination – or worse, make you throw your laptop off the highest building.  But I digress.  I thought it would be helpful to all of you in the void of the Query world to learn something from my research…and mistakes.


A Synopsis is typically 1 to 2 pages and is an overview of your manuscript.  It provides plot details, character info and sometimes even reveals any/all twists in the story.  Not many agents want, or have time for, the synopsis.  They want the Query letter.

A Query letter is a teaser of your story.  Apparently many authors actually end up using some form of the original Query letter that helped them land an agent for their book jacket.  You know, the paragraph you read online or at the bookstore to entice you to buy said book.  It is super tough, and often harder than writing the actual book.  A Query letter is about 2 paragraphs and typically starts with what type of book (genre), how many words, and why you chose that particular agency to Query.  Then no more than 2 paragraphs that summarize your ENTIRE novel without giving away anything, but still getting an agent to say, “gee, this sounds interesting and might be a good fit for my client list.”

I am going to put my first Query letter in this blog, even though it was not so good, so you can see how important it is to take your time.


Somewhere between the realm of life and death lies the burden of the Traghettatore.

Darion Azabe’s tedious teenage life overturns when his father’s car accident sends him hurdling toward a mysterious family legacy. Traveling to the sleepy town of Lafayette, Indiana, Darion and his sidekick Renee Stark unearth a powerful destiny buried deep beneath his deceased mother’s family tree.  Soon he comes to understand the magical world of the Traghettatore, a group of select people fated to ferry lost souls to their rightful resting place.

Darion’s life grows increasingly complex after meeting Darby Therse, his troubled counterpart within the family bloodline. He quickly learns that Darby will play a vital role in shaping the future – and his own fate.  After honing their respective elemental gifts, the fledgling Traghettatores will be deemed light or dark, forcing them to journey to the enlightened plane or the underworld.  But when shocking family secrets are revealed, rage and betrayal pit the Traghettatores in an epic supernatural battle that will forever alter the balance between life and death within the realms.

The Welling: Creations is a completed 79,000 word YA supernatural novel with high potential for a trilogy. The novel has an underlying LGBT storyline with interweaving threads of forbidden romance and humor, echoing the Beautiful Creatures series with regard to the supernatural world, but also has a heavy accent in the afterlife.

I have published several articles including theatre reviews in local papers and my college paper, community pieces in Design Magazine, and copywriting experience with web site and brochure creation for and; however, this is my first novel.  I have researched your company and am highly impressed with your accolades in the YA and Thriller genre; moreover, your enthusiasm to work side by side with authors is refreshing.  All of these things lead me to believe that The Welling: Creations would be a great fit for the Trident Media Group.  Even though I am querying a handful of agents simultaneously, I would be honored by your representation.  If you are looking for a diamond in the “slush”, I am the author for you!  Thank you for your time, and I hope to hear from you soon!


Diamond in the slush…shoot me!  At the time I thought it was clever, now It’s just embarrassing.  This is much more of a Synopsis than a Query letter, far too much detail and way too long.  I have revamped, rewritten and rerouted three other Query letters since then, and although I’m still getting rejections, I’m not embarrassed by my letter.  Here is the latest draft I wrote and sent out.  It’s still too wordy, but its a work in progress.


Between death and the rebirth lies the burden of the Traghettatore.

Eighteen year old Darion Azabe unearths a supernatural secret buried deep within the roots of his family tree that will shift his destiny in unimaginable ways. He is the next in line to become a Traghettatore; an ancestral ferryman fated to carry lost souls through the shadow veil.  Guided by a cryptic ghost and a gypsy fortune teller, Darion edges closer to his first soul crossing and learns that his fate is inexplicably tied to another.

Darion is only one side of a cosmic coin – the yin to someone’s darker yang – and his counterpart Darby Therse hides secrets of his own. When Darby reveals a devastating family cover up, fate is rewritten and an epic paranormal battle ensues, culminating in the birth of a biblical prophecy that will rip the delicate balance of the spirit planes apart – unless it can be stopped.

The Welling: Creations is a completed 79,000 word Paranormal YA manuscript with high potential for a trilogy. This supernatural novel has a balanced mix of straight and gay characters with threads of forbidden romance and a thriller instinct.

With a degree in Journalism, I have published several articles in local newspapers, wrote community pieces for Design Magazine, and have copywriting experience with web site and brochure creation for companies like and, but this is my first novel.  Thank you in advance for your time.


The lesson here is take your time and really put some thought into your Query letter before you send it out to the world.  I know you’re excited, I’m finally done with this book and I can’t wait to send it out and get it published, but trust me…wait until it’s perfect!

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